Hey Dan - the mystery of blogger-based disappearances! Anyway, with the right kind of voice track (which I hope you're going to solicit professionally via voiceovers.co.uk!) it will work well; that said, I think you should personalise it more, but replacing 'their victim' with 'you' - as in, 'whenever your body's defences are breached...' Just makes it more about the audience etc.
Hey Dan - the mystery of blogger-based disappearances! Anyway, with the right kind of voice track (which I hope you're going to solicit professionally via voiceovers.co.uk!) it will work well; that said, I think you should personalise it more, but replacing 'their victim' with 'you' - as in, 'whenever your body's defences are breached...' Just makes it more about the audience etc.
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